These Poems are Educational but Not Exactly Sensational
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While the subject matter of D.S. Pais’ poetry is inspiring, these verses are not.
D. S. Pais’ “Poetry on Inspiring Women -Book Two,” published in 2019, is a collection of odes to important women in history. She writes the praises of women like Mary Seacole, Jane Austen and others. The jubilant nature of the work is carried by purple text on a blue background but this unique look cannot disguise the technical aspects that continuously nag the reader.
A particularly aggravating feature of this collection is the lack of punctuation. This is especially irritating as Pais writes all of the poems using a couplet rhyme scheme. The use of punctuating bodies would not only alert readers as to which lines should be read together but also create some variety in the verses. The way the work is now, the lines exist as if they were simply inserted to rhyme and only vaguely connect with each other. An example of this unfortunate construction occurs in the second stanza of “Unnamed Author:”
“Love and Friendship” mocked sensibility novels
She had a way with consonants and vowels
Embarked her journey as a professional writer
“Sense and Sensibility” became her first work later
Pais’ lack of attention to detail is what causes these poems to become points of frustration rather than the works of praise she intended them to be. Pais should challenge herself to think beyond the end rhymes and chisel the lines into more artistic forms. The rhyme scheme is controlling her in this collection when it should be the other way around. Punctuation doesn’t remove the poetic nature of a piece. It could actually help heighten its poetic prowess.
“Poetry on Inspiring Women -Book Two” doesn’t lack passion, just finesse. It is obvious that Pais is an earnest poet who is moved by her subjects – so much so that she wrote an entire collection to honor them. Like Austen, she is inspired by women and wants this work to be a gift to all. She tells stories that need to be shared, but they could done so with a bit more polish. As there are many more women Pais could write about, it will be intriguing to watch this writer’s further progression with poetry.
If you would like to learn about more female historical figures, you can purchase “Poetry on Inspiring Women -Book Two” from your local bookstore or online.
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